just being picky here, but 'they wait for an unfortunate soul to *come along*' - just doesn't have that poetic ring... 'come along' just seems a bit weak and generic in comparison with everything else?
Oh alright, I didn't know that. :o I just thought it had a nice rhythm but I will make changes accordingly.
just being picky here, but 'they wait for an unfortunate soul to *come along*' - just doesn't have that poetic ring... 'come along' just seems a bit weak and generic in comparison with everything else?
ReplyDeleteOh alright, I didn't know that. :o I just thought it had a nice rhythm but I will make changes accordingly.
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